Dread Lord Havok
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Post by Dread Lord Havok on Jul 23, 2020 15:39:23 GMT -8
U-Raider Class Corvette (the ship looks exactly like a Raider Class Corvette, except with a sensor boom sticking straight up out of the bridge, like a submarine periscope.) Ship Class: Corvette Class Ship Role: Corvette; Ambush Ship, Commerce Raider Length: 150 meters Agility (A): 1 Defensive (D): 2 Offensive (O): 5 Speed (S): 4Special Gear: 2: Imperfect Stygium cloaking device. Description: The U-Raider was a modified variant of the Raider Class Corvette. It carries 13 officers and 77 crew, and no soldiers. The 6 Twin heavy laser cannon turrets on each ship were removed and replaced with 6 forward facing torpedo/missile launchers. The ship was equipped with Diamond-boron missiles, but could also fire an assortment of torpedoes or other missiles. The light single turbolasers were replaced with 2 quad laser point defense turrets. The single Ion cannons were replaced with one light turbolaser. Both the point-defense lasers and light turbolaser were wired to be inoperable without power while the ship was cloaked. Only the torpedoes could be fired while the ship was cloaked. Because of the exceptional energy demands on the cloaking device, the ship could not engage the hyperdrive and cloaking device at the same time. If the ship was unable to cloak, it had to rely on its exceptional speed to escape. The ship was designed and modified to carry a stygium cloaking device. The cloaking device was imperfect, and left the ship mostly double-blind. To surmount the limitations of the imperfect cloaking device, the ship deployed its sensors (both targeting and navigational) in a retractable periscope boom that could be extended out beyond the cloaking “bubble” created by the cloaking device. The cloaking device only created a cloaked field or envelope in an elliptical shaped bubble immediately around the ship's center of mass allowing the sensor boom to be extended outside of the cloaking field.
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Post by Zion Morviael [RETIRED] on Jul 23, 2020 19:19:54 GMT -8
Hey Dread Lord Havok, just in terms of formatting, could you please reformat this with the following code: [b][font size="5"]-insert vessel's class name-[/font][/b]
[img src="-insert image-" style="max-width:100%;" alt=" "]
[b]Ship Class:[/b] Ship Class
[b]Ship Role:[/b] Ship Role
[b]Ship Length:[/b] 0 meters
[b]Agility (A):[/b] 0
[b]Defensive (D):[/b] 0
[b]Offensive (O):[/b] 0
[b]Speed (S):[/b] 0
[b]Special Gear:[/b] 0
[b]Description:[/b]
-Description of submission's armament, vital details, and other necessities.As a further note, your MAD stats remain the same cloaked and uncloaked. Your systems would not uninstall themselves entirely from your ship when it cloaks. Full cloak systems also count as 2 points. Also, Custom ships have a top limit of 15 points and generally only one MAD stat should be a 5 (as that counts for 6 points), unless you have everything else counts as a 1 if you have 2 stats at 5. As for an image, we do need one. You can just describe the sensor boom location in the description if you just use the standard Raider image. Everything else is looking good though. |
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Dread Lord Havok
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Post by Dread Lord Havok on Jul 24, 2020 3:16:56 GMT -8
Perhaps what I am properly proposing is the approval of 2 separate ships on one page. The U-Raider class cloaked, and the U-raider class uncloaked. The power drains and demands of the cloaking device are that stark that it warrants two different stat values for the ship.
Changes: fonts, stat numbers, bold, attempted images (posted links b/c images not displaying), To the description: more clearly state that the ship really functioned as if it had two modes (justifying two sets of stats for those modes), and that the ship may blow up if the energy safeguards are circumvented. Added cloaking time limitation due to solar panels needing to recharge.
Question: would the sensor boom and missiles be considered special gear with point values? I just assumed they might since they weren't necessarily standard, and I am basically using the periscope to make a double blind cloaking device something halfway between a hibridium cloaking device and a stygium cloaking device.
Point for debate: If I used stygium, then I wouldn't need the boom, but would it still be 2 points for the cloaking device? If the periscope is special gear then the cloaking device and periscope would be 2+1, right? But I would have the weakness of being blind if the periscope was destroyed, unlike with a stygium device. To save points, should I make a less balanced ship by nixing the periscope, and just use a stygium cloaking device since both types of devices are 2 points?
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Post by Zion Morviael [RETIRED] on Jul 24, 2020 15:26:39 GMT -8
[img src="https://vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/e/e0/Raider-class_corvette_XWM.png" style="max-width:70%;" alt=" "]Just a suggestion for what to replace the five or six images/URL’s. Like I said, we just need 1 image, and this one looks like it’d work best. The MAD system is about the total potential of the ship, regardless of what state the ship is in. Whether you’re cloaked or unclaimed, you’re still carrying around the same amount of gear. You’re just using the limited amount of power slightly differently. Even if you’re not actively using a weapon or item, you are still carrying it with the potential to use it. And the point of this system is to give people an idea of what potential your ship has in comparison to theirs. Nicademus Delvardus IV , Viox Savage Either of you two care to comment on this one? The missiles would probably not count as Special Gear. They would be considered part of your offensive stat. But the sensor boom would be, since it’s not a standard piece of kit. Cloaking devices whether Stygium or Hybridium count as 2 points. We do not differentiate between them. A sensor boom arm would be far too small an item in the vastness of space that even if you used it to counter the effects of the double blind, it wouldn’t immediately give your location away. At least in my opinion. I’ll let others weigh in on that regard ( Nicademus Delvardus IV , Viox Savage , or really anyone else since that’s how the database works) |
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Post by Nicademus Delvardus IV on Jul 24, 2020 16:15:31 GMT -8
First, definitely need to eliminate all the images and choose one.
Second, we really don't need a comparison between cloaked and uncloaked. It's either one or the other. I don't think we need a point for diamond-boron missiles. Also what is this sensor boom periscope? I guess that could be a point considering its a unique feature. And as Zion said, cloaking devices whether Stygium or Hybridium count as 2 points. We do not differentiate between them. A sensor boom arm would be far too small an item in the vastness of space that even if you used it to counter the effects of the double blind, it wouldn’t immediately give your location away.
There is just a little too much information and two different sets of stats that make things confusing. We really need it to be a bit more concise and precise.
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Dread Lord Havok
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Post by Dread Lord Havok on Jul 25, 2020 7:22:23 GMT -8
First time doing this. I appreciate the feedback. I will further update the ship and this post. I will type "DONE" at the bottom of this post when I have addressed/responded to all the points above.
List of progress:
Images: I just figured out that it was my browser that was screwing with me. I posted multiple pictures, b/c I had my browser not displaying them. FIXED.
Stats:equals 15. FIXED
Description: FIXED
Title: changed to add [Customed], FIXED
DONE!
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Post by Nicademus Delvardus IV on Jul 25, 2020 7:52:17 GMT -8
I'd choose the 2nd image as the first one is being used by the actual raider-class corvette. Also I can make the 2nd image smaller for here. Use this image here! |
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Post by The Fallen on Jul 26, 2020 6:32:54 GMT -8
as an aside, just edit the thread title to be: [Custom] U-Raider Class Corvette
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Post by Nicademus Delvardus IV on Aug 1, 2020 7:14:50 GMT -8
Overall, looks good!
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Post by Dread Lord Havok on Aug 2, 2020 5:31:18 GMT -8
Updated the description to exclude story telling elements. Ready for next round of feedback, or approval.
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Post by Zion Morviael [RETIRED] on Aug 2, 2020 18:58:17 GMT -8
APPROVED.
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Post by Nicademus Delvardus IV on Aug 29, 2020 17:32:23 GMT -8
Approved!
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